This paper is about the Athens music community and how it works as a Discourse community. I thought it was a good topic for the assigned ethnography. In the paper he explains what the AMC is and what they do. Another topic discussed is the interview conducted, and the answers given.
I thought the paper was well written. However, one of the first things to pop out at me was that after a good introduction, the first paragraph is rather short. I think there could be more detail added when explaining what the AMC is. He makes very general points and for someone who has never heard of it before, they may be wanting to read more into it. I do however think he did a good job incorporating the sources form the book. I also thought it was good that we were provided with the questions used for the interviews. This helps us to understand where the answers given are coming from. I also felt that the analysis of the interview really brought it all together. One last thing I think could use some improvement is that instead of telling us where the conclusion, analysis, etc. is, he should maybe find a way to transition it so it flows, yet we know where the paper is trying to take us.
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