Tuesday, November 13, 2012
Response to Flynn articles
Reading these articles was a bit frustrating because I don't really like feminists. However, they did introduce new ideas to think about. One of which is the idea that males and females write differently. Not only do they write differently, but they write about different things. I see how she compared the essays, and I understand her point of view. But, I also think that both males and females are capable of writing the same quality paper. Everybody has different writing styles, and I think there are plenty of males out there who can write a paper better than I can because I'm not afraid to admit that writing just isn't my thing.
Thursday, November 8, 2012
project 3 peer review examle
This paper is about the Athens music community and how it works as a Discourse community. I thought it was a good topic for the assigned ethnography. In the paper he explains what the AMC is and what they do. Another topic discussed is the interview conducted, and the answers given.
I thought the paper was well written. However, one of the first things to pop out at me was that after a good introduction, the first paragraph is rather short. I think there could be more detail added when explaining what the AMC is. He makes very general points and for someone who has never heard of it before, they may be wanting to read more into it. I do however think he did a good job incorporating the sources form the book. I also thought it was good that we were provided with the questions used for the interviews. This helps us to understand where the answers given are coming from. I also felt that the analysis of the interview really brought it all together. One last thing I think could use some improvement is that instead of telling us where the conclusion, analysis, etc. is, he should maybe find a way to transition it so it flows, yet we know where the paper is trying to take us.
I thought the paper was well written. However, one of the first things to pop out at me was that after a good introduction, the first paragraph is rather short. I think there could be more detail added when explaining what the AMC is. He makes very general points and for someone who has never heard of it before, they may be wanting to read more into it. I do however think he did a good job incorporating the sources form the book. I also thought it was good that we were provided with the questions used for the interviews. This helps us to understand where the answers given are coming from. I also felt that the analysis of the interview really brought it all together. One last thing I think could use some improvement is that instead of telling us where the conclusion, analysis, etc. is, he should maybe find a way to transition it so it flows, yet we know where the paper is trying to take us.
intro/synthesis for project 3
In the article "Literacy, Discourse, and Linguistics", James Paul Gee, Professor of Reading at the University of Wisconsin at Madison, discusses the importance of Discourses. He describes them as "ways of being in the world" or "saying (writing)-doing-being-valuing-believing combinations". We use Discourses in our everyday life as as way to communicate with others. There is more than one type of Discourse. Some of the different types are dominant, non dominant, primary, and secondary to name a few.
In the article Gee says that we are never "'purely' members of a single Discourse but, rather, that a given Discourse is influenced by other Discourses of which we're also members". What he is saying is that we may not ever be able to fully be a part of one single Discourse because it is effected by so many other Discourses.
In the article Gee says that we are never "'purely' members of a single Discourse but, rather, that a given Discourse is influenced by other Discourses of which we're also members". What he is saying is that we may not ever be able to fully be a part of one single Discourse because it is effected by so many other Discourses.
proposal for project 3
For project three I plan to use my learning community as my discourse community. It is a group that I am very involved in, and I see them quite often therefore making it easy to find someone to interview. Also, since I am so involved I will be able to easily write about it.
peer review for project 2
I found this paper to mainly be about the way Dr. Seuss affected our literacy as we were children. One argument made was that no matter how good some other children's books may be, they do not teach us nearly as much as Dr. Seuss books did. Even though they were fun and colorful, they all had a deeper meaning to teach us different lessons in each one.
I liked the opening of this paper because it catches your attention. Almost everyone can relate to Dr. Seuss so you are immediately drawn to read the rest of the paper. Another good quality of this project is the twitter page created. It really brings together the mood they are trying to set my incorporating Dr. Seuss. The background provided about his books is good, however there are a few spots with a shaky transition. The survey was a good way to keep your attention. I also like that each member f the group gave their response to the results rather than just putting them there for us to figure out on our own. I would suggest however, that more detail be added to the actual writing portion of the paper.
I liked the opening of this paper because it catches your attention. Almost everyone can relate to Dr. Seuss so you are immediately drawn to read the rest of the paper. Another good quality of this project is the twitter page created. It really brings together the mood they are trying to set my incorporating Dr. Seuss. The background provided about his books is good, however there are a few spots with a shaky transition. The survey was a good way to keep your attention. I also like that each member f the group gave their response to the results rather than just putting them there for us to figure out on our own. I would suggest however, that more detail be added to the actual writing portion of the paper.
Dialectical Journal for Gee
"'Language' is a misleading term; it too often suggests "grammar." It is a truism that a person can know perfectly the grammar of a language and not know how to use that language."
-This is saying that when one discusses language it is often assumed that with language comes grammar. This however is not true because these days especially, proper grammar is a big problem. Just because one knows the English language, it doesn't necessarily mean they will have the grammar down.
"At any moment we are using language we must say or write the right thing in the right way while playing the right social role and (appearing) to hold the right values, beliefs, and attitudes."
-If we are going to use language we must be able to use it correctly. If you use it incorrectly people can't understand what you are saying. This not only contributes to how we speak, but also how we act, dress, and how our values, beliefs, attitudes, etc. are portrayed.
"A Discourse is a sort of "identity kit" which comes complete with the appropriate costume and instructions on how to act, talk, and often write, so as to take on a particular role that others will recognize."
-A Discourse is what defines our role in society. Examples of this are doctor, teacher, student, member of a club, regular at a local bar, etc.
"After our initial socialization in our home community, each of us interacts with various non-home-based social institutions-institutions in the public sphere, beyond the family and immediate kin and peer group."
This is when we reach out to groups other than our families.
-examples: churches, schools, community groups
-This is saying that when one discusses language it is often assumed that with language comes grammar. This however is not true because these days especially, proper grammar is a big problem. Just because one knows the English language, it doesn't necessarily mean they will have the grammar down.
"At any moment we are using language we must say or write the right thing in the right way while playing the right social role and (appearing) to hold the right values, beliefs, and attitudes."
-If we are going to use language we must be able to use it correctly. If you use it incorrectly people can't understand what you are saying. This not only contributes to how we speak, but also how we act, dress, and how our values, beliefs, attitudes, etc. are portrayed.
"A Discourse is a sort of "identity kit" which comes complete with the appropriate costume and instructions on how to act, talk, and often write, so as to take on a particular role that others will recognize."
-A Discourse is what defines our role in society. Examples of this are doctor, teacher, student, member of a club, regular at a local bar, etc.
"After our initial socialization in our home community, each of us interacts with various non-home-based social institutions-institutions in the public sphere, beyond the family and immediate kin and peer group."
This is when we reach out to groups other than our families.
-examples: churches, schools, community groups
Dialectical Journal for Swales
"We need then to clarify, for procedural purposes, what is to be understood by discourse community and, perhaps in the present circumstances, it is better to offer a set of criteria sufficiently narrow that it will eliminate many of the marginal, blurred and controversial contenders."
-This quote is simply forcing us to understand what a discourse community is. We need to recognize that the definition can be confused and this passage is trying to explain that to us. It sets the guidelines that we need to know to choose a discourse community for project three.
"A 'strong' list of crieria will also avoid the circularity problem, because in consequence it will certainly follow that not all communities-as defined on other criteria-will be discourse communities, just as it will follow that not all discourse activity is relevant to discourse community consolidation."
-This tells us the importance of having criteria for discourse communities. By having a list, we have something to help us determine if a group is a discourse community or not. Also, some things within a discourse community may not fit the criteria so we must be able to decide what is and what isn't.
"A speech community is defined, then, tautologically but radically, as a community sharing knowledge of rules for the conduct and interpretation of speech. Such sharing comprises knowledge of at least one form of speech, and knowledge also of its patterns of use. Both conditions are necessary."
-A speech community is when as a group you mutually have the same understanding of speech.
Dialectical Journal for Brandt
"Literacy looms as one of the great engines of profit and competitive advantage in the 20th century: a lubricant for consumer desire; a means for integrating corporate markets; a foundation for the deployment of weapons and other technology; a raw material in mass production of information."
-This is saying that literacy is a big part of our lives in a number of ways. Without literacy we would not be able to do anything. It is a way of communicating and bringing people together for different reasons. Literacy is like the backbone of our society and everything we do. The last sentence is saying that information can not be spread without it. It is essentially the key ingredient to the recipe of information.
"Intuitively, sponsors seemed a fitting term for the figures who turned up most typically in people's memories of literacy learning: old relatives, teachers, priests, supervisors, military officers, editors, influential authors."
-In this quote, Brandt is describing the way we look at how our literacy history is affected. A sponsor can mean many different things, the most general way to look at it is the way a sponsor helps us and supports us. This relates back to this statement and our literacy because the people who affected our literacy when we were younger can be considered our "literary sponsor".
"A focus on sponsorship can force a more explicit and substantive link between literacy learning and systems of opportunity and access."
-The point this statement is trying to make is that when you look at your literacy sponsor, you can see a connection between them and your opportunity at literacy. If you have a number of good supportive sponsors, then you have a good opportunity at literacy. However, if there is no on to support you literacy, you will not have the same access to it as others.
-This is saying that literacy is a big part of our lives in a number of ways. Without literacy we would not be able to do anything. It is a way of communicating and bringing people together for different reasons. Literacy is like the backbone of our society and everything we do. The last sentence is saying that information can not be spread without it. It is essentially the key ingredient to the recipe of information.
"Intuitively, sponsors seemed a fitting term for the figures who turned up most typically in people's memories of literacy learning: old relatives, teachers, priests, supervisors, military officers, editors, influential authors."
-In this quote, Brandt is describing the way we look at how our literacy history is affected. A sponsor can mean many different things, the most general way to look at it is the way a sponsor helps us and supports us. This relates back to this statement and our literacy because the people who affected our literacy when we were younger can be considered our "literary sponsor".
"A focus on sponsorship can force a more explicit and substantive link between literacy learning and systems of opportunity and access."
-The point this statement is trying to make is that when you look at your literacy sponsor, you can see a connection between them and your opportunity at literacy. If you have a number of good supportive sponsors, then you have a good opportunity at literacy. However, if there is no on to support you literacy, you will not have the same access to it as others.
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